05 Eventful Evening: language improvements, fix of a critical logic error

Originally, I had the idea that any knowledge of the outside world is
forbidden knowledge but I have since decided (and written with the
assumption) that people generally know of the outside world but regard it
as completely uninhabitable.

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@@ -84,7 +84,7 @@
   Annie looks through the window in the door as the train enters the
   station. The platform is empty except for a shady figure in a hoodie
   leaning against the wall, observing the train from under his hood. She
-  looks at the clock on the station: 10:34 PM - a bit late. As soon as he
+  looks at the clock in the station: 10:34 PM - a bit late. As soon as he
   notices her, he steps away from the wall and walks up to the train.
   <span class="comment"> Is there a more elegant way to say that he stops
   leaning on the wall? </span> The pressurized air for the doors hisses in
@@ -115,7 +115,7 @@
   <span class="speech">Well, there might be. Some friends of mine say there
   is.</span><br />
   Annie thinks about it for a moment. Before yesterday, she wasn&apos;t
-  even aware that there was a world outside the dome - and now she might
+  even aware that life could exist outside the dome - and now she might
   find out about a way to go there? <br />
   <span class="speech">Tell me more</span>, she replies.
 </p>
@@ -139,8 +139,7 @@
   feels dense and depleted, and carries the smell of alcohol. Live
   musicians are playing <span class="comment"> Idk? Music genre? Need ideas
   </span> on a small stage area in the corner. <br />
-  <span class="speech">Hey Kate, I&apos;ll take a <span class="comment">
-  some very alcoholic drink? &quot;Braincell Rattler&quot;? Idk </span>
+  <span class="speech">Hey Kate, I&apos;ll take a Braincell Rattler
   and my uhh... friend here looks like she needs a coffee.</span><br />
   <span class="speech">Okay. Going to the back room?</span><br />
   <span class="speech">Yeah.</span><br />