'zb' <reaching Nova Metropolis>: revision, fill in some gaps

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 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">Good morning, Annie! Pancakes are ready.</span>
   <br />
-  Jack takes his hand off her shoulder. She <span class="comment">st&uuml;tzt
+  Jack takes his hand off her shoulder. She pushes herself up from her bed
-  sich hoch</span> and looks around in confusion. James is driving the bus
+  and looks around in confusion. James is driving the bus on a surprisingly
-  on a surprisingly very intact highway though a seemingly endless desert.
+  very intact highway through a seemingly endless landscape of sand and
-  <span class="comment">might benefit from a description of said desert
+  sparse vegetation. The sun is already high up in the sky and
-  </span> Yesterday&apos;s mountains are still visible in the far distance
+  yesterday&apos;s mountains are in the distance far behind them. Jack goes
-  behind them. Jack goes to wake up Michelle, then he tells James who pulls
+  to wake up Michelle, then he tells James who stops the bus and turns off
-  over onto the side of the highway and stops the bus. The engine goes
+  the engine.
-  quiet.
 </p>
 <p>
-  <span class="comment">Annie gets up, they sit down around a table
+  Annie swings her legs out of bed to sit up straight. She stretches,
-  and start to eat. Also, a mention of what the dog is up to...</span>
+  gets up, and walks <span class="comment">shuffles?</span> over to the
+  table. Jack puts a large plate with a pile of pancakes in the center and
+  grabs plates for everyone. He also places a few jars on the table:
+  Honey, Chocco <span class="comment">TODO: Add an advert for Chocco
+  somewhere earlier in the story. It&apos;s the in-universe equivalent
+  of Nutella.</span>, and cinnamon with sugar <span class="comment">Is that
+  combination as ubiquitous worldwide as it is in Germany? If so, does it
+  have a proper name?</span>. James gets up from the driver's seat and Dora
+  follows him, wagging her tail. They all sit down around the table,
+  including Dora who sits on the floor and <span class="comment">macht
+  gro&szlig;e augen</span>.<br />
+  <span class="comment">What is the English command for a dog to lay
+  down?</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  <span class="quote speech">So when are we gonna reach the &lt;mining
+  Michelle asks: <span class="quote speech">So when are we gonna reach
-  company&gt; pit?</span>, Michelle asks.<br />
+  the &lt;mining company&gt; pit?</span><br />
   Jack looks at James. James tilts his head slightly and shrugs.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Like two hours ago?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Like five hours ago?</span><br />
+  <!-- Jack's shift until midnight, James' shift until 6AM, plan was for
+  Michelle's shift to start at the pit, it is now 9AM. -->
   <span class="quote speech">You&apos;re kidding.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Didn&apos;t wanna wake you up.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Uhh...</span> Michelle is at a loss for words.
   <br />
   James grins.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I won&apos;t drive from
+  She says: <span class="quote speech">Can&apos;t even be mad... But
-  here.</span><br />
+  doesn&apos;t that mean that we&apos;re way ahead of time?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Can&apos;t even be mad... Wait, doesn&apos;t
+  James shrugs again.<br />
-  that mean that we&apos;re way ahead of time?</span><br />
+  Jack glances at his watch and says: <span class="quote speech">About
-  James shrugs again, this time holding up his hands. She turns to Jack:
+  two and a half hours give or take. With a bit of luck, we&apos;ll be
-  <br />
+  even more ahead when we arrive. We&apos;ve had some quite favorable
-  <span class="quote speech">How much ahead are we?</span><br />
+  winds.</span><br />
-  He glances at his watch.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">About three hours - but if you&apos;re as
-  lucky as James, we&apos;ll be even more ahead by the time we arrive. The
-  wind has favored us so far.</span><br />
-  Annie chimes in: <span class="quote speech">You didn&apos;t sleep, did
-  you?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Sleep is overrated anyway - but, if you allow
-  it, I&apos;ll be going to sleep very soon.</span>
-</p>
-<p class="comment">
-  missing section?
 </p>
 <p>
-  The four do quick work of the dishes. Annie washes them, Jack rinses them
+  The four finish their meal and James feeds Dora. Afterwards, they do
-  off in a bowl of clean water, James dries them, and Michelle puts them
+  quick work of the dishes. Annie washes them, Jack rinses them off in
-  away. Jack goes to the back of the bus to sleep. The others go to the
+  a bowl of clean water, James dries them, and Michelle puts them away.
-  front.
+  Jack goes to the back of the bus to sleep. The others go to the front.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Michelle sits down in the driver&apos;s seat.<br />
+  Michelle sits down in the driver&apos;s seat and attempts to start
-  James yawns. <span class="quote speech">Now that I&apos;m thinking about
+  the engine. Nothing happens.<br />
-  it, taking a nap sounds very entising... <span class="comment">Is that
+  James says: <span class="quote speech">Oh yeah, that&apos;s been an
-  how you spell that?</span></span><br />
+  issue.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Well, you&apos;ve ...</span> Michelle goes to
+  He grabs a wrench and a jumper cable. Michelle lets him out and he heads
-  turn the key but nothing happens. She stops mid-sentence.<br />
+  to the back. They hear him opening a panel followed by arcing noises
-  James says: <span class="quote speech"> Oh, that&apos;s been a problem.
+  and the engine starts cranking. Michelle turns the key and it fires up.
-  Can you open the door for a sec?</span><br />
+</p>
-  <span class="quote speech">Sure</span>, she replies with a tone of
+<p>
-  bewilderment in her voice.<br />
+  James returns inside and yawns.<br />
-  James grabs a jumper cable and heads outside. They hear him opening some
+  <span class="quote speech">The idea of a nap is very entising
-  panel in the back of the bus followed by arcing noises. The engine begins
+  <span class="comment">spelling?</span> right about now...</span><br />
-  to turn over. Michelle turns the key again. Finally, the engine starts
+  Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">Well, you&apos;ve earned
-  running. James slams the panel shut and returns.<br />
+  it.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">As I was about to say: You&apos;ve definitely
+  <span class="quote speech">Thinking about it but not yet...</span><br />
-  earned that nap. Thanks for driving part of my
+  He sits down behind Michelle and leans forward. <span class="comment">
-  <span class="comment">shift</span>.</span><br />
+  Mention at some point before this that there is no wall between the
-  <span class="quote speech">Still considering it...</span><br />
+  driver&apos;s seat and the passenger seats behind it. Maybe they removed
-  The engine roars as Michelle sets the bus in motion again.
+  it for some reason, maybe it wasn&apos;t there to begin with,</span>
-  <span class="comment">Something is missing here. Idk.</span>
+  The engine roars as she accelerates the bus and they continue their way.
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