05 Eventful Evening: start filling a gap

05-Eventful_Evening-secret_organization.html

@@ -134,7 +134,7 @@
   here in a little while.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Lucas suddenly turns left and enters one of the bars. Annie follows him.
+  Lucas suddenly turns left and enters one of the bars. Annie follows.
   The air feels dense and depleted, and carries the smell of alcohol. A guy
   is playing ragtime on a piano in the corner. They make their way through
   the crowded room towards the counter.<br />
@@ -149,8 +149,10 @@
   Lucas takes off his hoodie and hangs it on a hook on the wall. Annie does
   the same with her jacket. She looks into the room: A bunch of people
   sitting around a large, round table - to her surprise including her
-  grandpa. Before she has time to voice her confusion, Kate sets their
-  drinks on a small table next to a window connecting to behind the
+  grandpa.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">You here? ...</span><br />
+  Before she has time to further voice her confusion, Kate sets their
+  drinks on a small table in front of the window connecting to behind the
   counter.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Here you go, enjoy!</span><br />
   Lucas walks up to it. <span class="quote speech">Thank you!</span><br />
@@ -158,27 +160,24 @@
   <span class="comment">Is there a better way to say this?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Thanks.</speech>
 </p>
-<p class="comment">
-  Someone else to the grandpa: Addresses him with Karl.
-  ...
-  Karl to Annie: I guess I owe you an explanation.
-</p>
 <p>
-  They sit down at the table. Karl starts introducing people and some
-  introduce themselves. Then, he continues talking about the group&apos;s
-  mission:
+  A woman addresses her grandpa: <span class="quote speech">Karl, you two
+  seem to know each other?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">My granddaughter Annie &ndash; good that
+  you&apos;re here, we were about to discuss the call we had
+  yesterday.</span><br />
+  He introduces Annie and the othe group members and everyone sits down
+  at the table. Karl <span class="comment">ergreift das Wort</span>:
 </p>
 <p class="quote speech">
   <span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span>
-  <span class="quote speech">We are working on getting the city officials
-  to change their stance on some things. When the city was built, it was
-  seen as sort of a plan B for humanity in case things would get worse.
-  It wasn&apos;t built as a place where we could go and hide forever in
-  isolation. Over time, knowledge of the outside world stopped being an
-  imagination of a possible bright future, and instead it became something
-  to be worried about. &#8216;What do you mean, you want to go there?
-  Do you really want to go where the air you breathe is literal poison
-  and die?&apos;</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">I guess I owe you an explanation.
+  We are working on getting the gates to the <span class="comment">dome
+  city</span> opened. When the city was built, it was seen as sort of a
+  plan B for humanity in case things would get worse, not as a hiding
+  space for eternity. Over time though, knowledge of what happened outside
+  turned into fear and a bunch of <i>what if</i>s, and any attempt to talk
+  sense into city officials fell on deaf ears.</span>
 </p>
 <p class="quote speech">
   <span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span>
@@ -196,7 +195,7 @@
     missing: more dialog to tie this together
   </li>
   <li class="comment">
-    Important information: The door Jack wants to open is of the same type
+    Important information: The door Jack wants to open is of similar type
     as the doors used for the airlocks.
   </li>
   <li class="comment">