01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html

@@ -145,7 +145,7 @@ $ █
   Hm...</span><br />
   He goes through the files but to no avail, no backup turns up. Nothing
   useful either. He does, however, find a note from 2030 saying that the
-  inhabitants of Sunside&nbsp;Cove have proven to be unhelpful when asked
+  inhabitants of &lt;dome city&gt; have proven to be unhelpful when asked
   for assistance. Too bad they are the ones that have a backup of the
   secondary hard drive &ndash; assuming there is anyone still living there.
 </p>

02-Unlikely_Encounter-Annie-intro.html

@@ -172,8 +172,8 @@ AgriWorks Login: █
   outside the dome.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">So there is no way we can help him?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Well not directly. Facility 53 does happen to
-  be on the mountain above Sunside&nbsp;Cove, but it isn&apos;t connected
+  be on the mountain above &lt;dome city&gt; but it isn&apos;t connected to
-  to the dome.</span><br />
+  the dome.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">How did he get there then?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">He ... didn&apos;t. He&apos;s been there from
   the start.</span><br />
@@ -229,7 +229,7 @@ i dont know  where would i find it
 
 You are in the city under the mountain, right?
 
-yes  sunside cove
+yes &lt;name of city&gt;
 
 The library should have it.
 I need the service manual for a Neotek Dynamics B33FY-AF Bunker Door.

05-Eventful_Evening-secret_organization.html

@@ -172,12 +172,12 @@
 <p class="quote speech">
   <span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span>
   <span class="quote speech">I guess I owe you an explanation.
-  We are working on opening up the gates connecting Sunside&nbsp;Cove to
+  We are working on getting the gates to the <span class="comment">dome
-  the outside world. When the city was built, it was seen as sort of a
+  city</span> opened. When the city was built, it was seen as sort of a
-  temporary plan B for humanity in case things would get worse, not as
+  plan B for humanity in case things would get worse, not as a hiding
-  a hiding space for all eternity. Over time though, knowledge of what
+  space for eternity. Over time though, knowledge of what happened outside
-  happened outside turned into fear and a bunch of <i>what if</i>s, and
+  turned into fear and a bunch of <i>what if</i>s, and any attempt to talk
-  any attempt to talk sense into city officials fell on deaf ears.</span>
+  sense into city officials fell on deaf ears.</span>
 </p>
 <p class="quote speech">
   <span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span>

mb-First_Steps_Outside.html

@@ -94,9 +94,9 @@
   through the landscape. Annie looks up, into the distance: The ruins
   further down the valley are larger the closer they are to the center
   of the urban area below.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s much bigger than
+  <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s much bigger than &lt;dome
-  Sunside&nbsp;Cove.</span><br />
+  city&gt;.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Many things are bigger than Sunside&nbsp;Cove.
+  <span class="quote speech">Many things are bigger than &lt;dome city&gt;.
   This is the smaller of two sister cities.</span><br />
   He points towards another urban center in the distance.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">That over there is Sentinel Shores, the place

notes/locations.txt

@@ -20,8 +20,8 @@ Cities:
   - buildings in various stages of disrepair 
     - no sky scrapers
   - many things were left behind, definitely worth looting random buildings
-- Sunside Cove
+- Underground Dome City 
-  - underground dome city
+  - still needs a name
   - inside a huge hermetically sealed dome under a mountain
   - basically a normal city otherwise 
     - mostly three to five story buildings
@@ -82,7 +82,7 @@ Facilities/Institutions:
       - Jack gets woken up due to impending hardware failure
       - Michelle stays preserved until she gets woken up by Jack
   - has enough supplies to last a lot of ppl for a long time
-- Sunside Cove library
+- <underground dome city> library 
   - has large computers in the basement
 - retro-futuristic data center 
   - located in Rogue Tides

qa-Overdue_Maintenence-power_station.html

@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@
   center console.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">The next maintenence expedition is scheduled
   for 2011... I don&apos;t think anyone ever stepped foot in here after
-  Sunside&nbsp;Cove was sealed off.</span><br />
+  &lt;dome city&gt; was closed off.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">It wouldn&apos;t surprise me.</span> Annie
   turns around and leans against the center console.
   <span class="quote speech">Apart from a small group, the entire city is

zz--end.html

@@ -4,16 +4,15 @@
 
 <p>
   The group sits around the pot with leftovers on the gas stove, enjoying
-  the view of the skyline from above. To increase their odds of seeing
+  the view of the skyline from above. They had decided to wait on top of
-  where Emily would land, they had decided to wait on top of one of the
+  one of the tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer to increase their
-  tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer. The intense light of the
+  odds of seeing where Emily would land. The intense light of the setting
-  setting sun paints Nova Metropolis in vibrant hues of yellow and orange
+  sun paints Nova Metropolis in vibrant hues of yellow and orange and the
-  while the moon is already coming over the horizon. They are engaged in
+  moon is already visible in the sky. They are engaged in a conversation
-  a conversation about the mind-boggling vastness of space and all it
+  about the mind-boggling vastness of space and all it contains.
-  contains.
 </p>
 <p class="strong">
-  bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep
+  bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep
 </p>
 <p>
   The alarm on Jack&apos;s watch interrupts them. He presses one of the
@@ -23,15 +22,13 @@
   They get up. James pulls a pair of binoculars out of his bag. Jack does
   the same. Annie looks at both of them - her face clearly showing her
   disappointment.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I got ya.</span> says Jack
+  <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I gotchu.</span> says Jack
-  as he pulls a second pair out of his bag and hands it to her with a grin.
+  as he pulls a second pair out of his bag before they start walking
-  <br />
+  towards the edge.
-  <span class="quote speech">Oh, thank you!</span> She takes it and they
-  start walking towards the edge.
 </p>
 <p>
   Michelle and James are already leaning against the railing and looking
-  towards the sky. Annie and Jack join them. Jack takes a compass out of
+  towards the sky. Jack and Annie join them. Jack takes a compass out of
   his pocket and briefly looks at it. Then, he points in a direction in the
   sky and says:<br />
   <span class="quote speech">The shuttle should appear somewhere around
@@ -40,38 +37,33 @@
   <span class="quote speech">I see it! There!</span> she exclaims before
   handing them back to him.<br />
   It looks like a tiny, red glowing dot in the sky, slowly growing in size.
-  For a few minutes, not much seems to happen. The dot gets bigger and
+  For a few minutes, nothing seems to happen. The dot gets bigger and
-  bigger, turning into a black triangle as the glow fades and finally
+  bigger, turning into a black triangle as the glow dims and finally
   disappears. The shuttle sheds its heat shield as it slowly comes closer.
 </p>
 <p>
   Around the 15 minute mark, Jack notices that it has moved almost above
   them.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s a bit too close for comfort
+  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s a bit too close for comfort &ndash;
-  &ndash; and way too fast.</span><br />
+  and way too fast.</span> he says.<br />
-  Looking at Annie, who seems visibly scared, he adds:<br />
+  Parts appear to be breaking off from it. They watch the last couple
-  <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s not gonna hit us, the odds of that
+  minutes of the fall realizing that something has gone seriously wrong.
-  are pretty slim, but something&apos;s not right.</span><br />
+  It plummets into the city, taking multiple buildings down with it.
-  As if on cue, the back of the shuttle breaks apart, turning into a
+  The ground shakes slightly. Nobody says anything for a while as they
-  cloud of fragments. <span class="comment">need a better way to say the
+  watch the buildings around the impact crumble and the remaining parts
-  very back</span> The rest plummets into the city moments later, taking
+  rain out of the sky in a mix of awe and shock.
-  multiple buildings down with it. The ground shakes slightly. Nobody says
-  anything for a while as they watch the buildings around the impact
-  crumble and the remaining parts of the shuttle rain out of the sky in a
-  mix of shock and awe.
 </p>
 <p>
   Michelle interrupts the silence: <span class="quote speech">Guys, over
   there!</span> She points into the sky behind them.
   <span class="quote speech">A parachute...</span><br />
-  <span class="comment">Jack: She has more luck than sense.</span><br />
   <span class="comment">reaction needed &ndash; something along the lines
   of &quot;Sie hat mehr Gl&uuml;ck als Verstand&quot;</span><br />
   They watch as it disappears between the buildings.
 </p>
 <p>
-  Annie walks over to their bags and, on a hunch, unpacks the radio
+  Annie walks over to Jack&apos;s bag and, on a hunch, unpacks the radio
-  Jack had insisted on bringing.<br />
+  he had insisted on bringing.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">Maybe, she can hear us from here...</span>
   <br />
   She hooks up the battery, flips the power switch, and turns the frequency
@@ -80,6 +72,7 @@
   that clear at some point before this chapter. Maybe include the part where
   Jack insists on bringing it.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Emily, can you hear us? Are you okay?</span>
+  <span class="comment">Might benefit from proper radio protocol</span>
   <br />
   They hear a slightly distorted but clearly happy response through the
   noise:<br />