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-For some reason, I am thinking about what happens after the end of the story. So uhh... Here we go, I guess:
+For some reason, I am thinking about what happens after the end of the story.
+So uhh... Here we go, I guess:
 
-Emily wakes up. She's laying in bed, looking out of the panorama window - what an odd déjà-vu in a world that is so different.
+Emily wakes up. She's laying in bed, looking out of the panorama window -
-Annie and Michelle are sitting on the floor playing cards. <description of a part of Nova Metropolis that has been damaged by the impact>
+what an odd déjà-vu in a world that is so different.
+Annie and Michelle are sitting on the floor playing cards.
+<description of a part of Nova Metropolis that has been damaged by the impact>
 Michelle nods towards her, Annie turns around.
-"Good morning. How was your night?"
+"Hey, good morning. How was your night?"
 "Awful. Everything is so heavy."
-She pushes herself up and looks around.
+Emily pushes herself up and looks around.
 "Where are the others?"
+Annie turns back to the window and points outside.
 Michelle grabs a radio and talks into it:
-"Jack, she's awake."
+"Jack, where are you? She's awake."
-Annie leans back to look out of the window. Emily looks in the same direction and momentarily sees the glint of a mirroring object being held
+They momentarily see the glint of a mirror being held into the sunlight from
-into the sunlight from one of the other buildings.
+half-way up a sky scraper on the other side of the crater.
 "What are thy doing over there?"
 Annie shakes her head.
-"I forgot to turn my radio off yesterday. Cue Jack waking me up just before dawn - he supposedly heard someone talking."
+"I forgot to turn my radio off yesterday. Cue Jack waking us up just before
+dawn - he heard people talking. They're taking the big radio up to that antenna
+over there."

mb-First_Steps_Outside.html

@@ -123,9 +123,16 @@
   to follow. After what feels like an eternity, she manages to get half-way
   down the wall.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">You can jump from there.</span><br />
-  <span class="comment">Something interesting needs to happen here.</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Are you sure? <span class="comment">translate:
-  <br />
+  Ich trau mich nicht.</span></span><br />
-  They make their way across the fast-flowing river by stepping on large
+  <span class="quote speech">Just don&apos;t try to land standing up.
-  stones in the water, and continue through the bushes towards the bunker.
+  <span class="comment">Winkel&apos; Deine Knie etwas an</span> and
+  you&apos;ll be fine.</span><br />
+  Annie hesitates. She climbs down another one of the sandstone blocks.
+  She looks down, looks back to the wall, looks down again, and finally
+  pushes herself off. Annie lands <span class="comment">adverb?</span>
+  and Jack helps her up. They make their way across the fast-flowing river
+  by stepping on large stones in the water, and continue through the bushes
+  towards the bunker.
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pm--emily_wake_up_again.html

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   <span class="quote non-speech">asleep or dead &mdash; she moved a tiny
   bit, she&apos;s breathing &mdash; asleep, phew.</span><br />
   Emily moves into a more comfortable position. Lena
-  <span class="comment">schrekt hoch</span> and looks disoriented for
+  <span class="comment">zuckt zusammen</span> and lifts her head, looking
-  a moment.<br />
+  disoriented for a moment.<br />
   She says in a weak voice: <span class="quote speech">So you will
   live.</span><br />
   Emily sits up.<br />
   <span class="quote speech">How long has it been?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">About three days.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Have you slept at all?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Here and there a little bit.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Here and there a bit.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">You need to sleep.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Funny you should say that...</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Funny you should say that... I couldn&apos;t
+  sleep because I was worried about you little devil.</span>
+</p>
+<p>
+  They get up and walk down the hallway towards the main control center.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">While you were unconscious, I managed to get
+  in touch with someone on Earth. Well, they really got in touch with me.</span>
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