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--- a/html_resources/style.css
+++ b/html_resources/style.css
@ -62,7 +62,6 @@ p, pre, ul, h2 {

 li ul {
  margin-left: 2em;
-  margin-bottom: 0;
  width: 100%;
 }

--- a/ka-Smells_Like_Train_Spirit-finding_the_train.html
+++ b/ka-Smells_Like_Train_Spirit-finding_the_train.html
@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
-<!DOCTYPE html><html><head><title> Smells Like Train Spirit </title><link rel="stylesheet" type="text/css" href="html_resources/style.css"></head><body><svg class="hidden_filter"><filter id="crunchy_blur" x="0" y="0"><feFlood x="4" y="4" height="2" width="2"/><feComposite width="6" height="6" in2="SourceGraphic"/><feTile result="a"/><feComposite in="SourceGraphic" in2="a" operator="in"/><feMorphology operator="dilate" radius="1.4"/><feGaussianBlur stdDeviation="2.2"></feGaussianBlur></filter></svg><div class="home"><a href="index.html">&#8962;</a></div>
+<!DOCTYPE html><html><head><title> I Like Trains </title><link rel="stylesheet" type="text/css" href="html_resources/style.css"></head><body><svg class="hidden_filter"><filter id="crunchy_blur" x="0" y="0"><feFlood x="4" y="4" height="2" width="2"/><feComposite width="6" height="6" in2="SourceGraphic"/><feTile result="a"/><feComposite in="SourceGraphic" in2="a" operator="in"/><feMorphology operator="dilate" radius="1.4"/><feGaussianBlur stdDeviation="2.2"></feGaussianBlur></filter></svg><div class="home"><a href="index.html">&#8962;</a></div>

-<h1>Smells Like Train Spirit</h1>
+<h1>I Like Trains</h1>
 <!-- perspective: Michelle -->
 <p>
  <span class="quote speech">Michelle! Guess what I found...</span><br />
@ -53,8 +53,8 @@
  Jack picks up a section of metal pipe and passes it to her. Putting it
  over the wrench for additional leverage, she pushes against it until the
  bolt snaps with a bang.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Guess that&apos;s not going back on...</span>
-  she says as she moves on to the next one.
+  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s certainly one of the ways to
+  unbolt this thing...</span> she says before moving on to the next one.
 </p>
 <p>
  One by one, she removes the other nuts. Some of them snap off, some
@ -63,16 +63,16 @@
  the wrench against its side until it comes loose...<br />
  <span class="quote speech">There&apos;s a whole loada nothing in
  here.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Woulda been too easy. Guess there are a bunch
-  more we can try...</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech"><i>Great.</i> I guess there are a bunch more
+  we can try.</span> <span class="comment">needs a better reaction, may
+  want to state disappointment explicitly</span><br />
  She jumps back down onto the end of the car.<br />
  <span class="quote speech">Looks like we&apos;ll be climbing a bunch of
  tank cars today.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Mind giving that back for a moment?</span>
-  He gestures for the wrench. <span class="quote speech">I got an
-  idea.</span><br />
-  Wrench in hand, he jumps over the gap to the next car and knocks on the
-  tank.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Let&apos;s see about that... Mind giving me
+  the wrench for a moment?</span><br />
+  He jumps over the gap between cars and uses it to knock against the wall
+  of the next tank.<br />
  <span class="quote speech">Sounds empty.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
@ -80,14 +80,14 @@
  when Jack hits it with the wrench. Michelle climbs on top again.
  The nuts on this one come off more easily and it doesn&apos;t take
  long until she lifts the lid.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Jackpot!</span> She catches a whiff of the
-  fumes coming from the liquid inside. <span class="quote speech">Smells
-  like diesel.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Jackpot!</span> She sniffs the smell coming
+  off the liquid inside. <span class="quote speech">Smells like
+  diesel.</span><br />
  <span class="quote speech">Nice! Let&apos;s find a truck or something...
  Wait, stupid idea but I need to show you...</span><br />
  <span class="quote speech">Oh no, what are you up to again?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Uhh... Nothing in particular... Wanna follow
-  me for a sec?</span>
+  <span class="quote speech">Nothing in particular. Wanna follow me for
+  a sec?</span>
 </p>
 <p>
  She jumps down and follows him back to the former doorway.
--- a/ph-diesel_creek.html
+++ b/ph-diesel_creek.html
@ -4,20 +4,20 @@

 <p>
  Michelle asks: <span class="quote speech">And you really expect to find
-  anything here that can be salvaged?</span><br />
+  machines here that can be salvaged?</span><br />
  The four are walking into a valley in a large forested area.<br />
  Jack replies: <span class="quote speech">Right now, I&apos;m not even
-  sure this is the place &ndash; everything looks so different &ndash; but
-  if it is, we&apos;ll have plenty machines to choose from and a bunch
-  more for parts.</span><br />
+  sure this is the place &ndash; everything looks so different &ndash; but,
+  if it is, we&apos;ll have plenty to choose from and a bunch more for
+  spare parts.</span><br />
  James gestures to the side, saying:
  <span class="quote speech">Look, over there.</span><br />
-  He points to a group of very rusty and completely overgrown machines.
+  He points out a group of very rusty and completely overgrown machines.
  <br />
-  Annie asks: <span class="quote speech">How did they get inbetween
+  Annie wonders: <span class="quote speech">How did they get inbetween
  the trees?</span><br />
  Jack says: <span class="quote speech">They didn&apos;t. The machines
-  came first, the trees grew after. This area wasn&apos;t even a forest
+  came first, the trees grew after. This wasn&apos;t a forest
  back then.</span><br />
  They make their way over to take a closer look.
 </p>
@ -29,18 +29,19 @@
  a big one like this, maybe a bit smaller, but not as small as that one
  over there &ndash; and preferably without trees growing out of
  it...</span><br />
-  He points to a mini excavator sitting askew on a tree trunk that had
-  grown through its floor and out the side.<br />
-  James asks: <span class="quote speech">Why not just use this big one?
+  He points to a small excavator that sits askew on a thick tree trunk
+  that had grown through the floor and out the side.
+  <span class="comment">Compact excavator? Tiny excavator?</span><br />
+  James asks: <span class="quote speech">Why not just use this one?
  What&apos;s wrong with it?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">This thing&apos;s just done for. It&apos;s
-  more rust than steel, missing its tracks and hydraulics for the bucket,
-  and it looks like someone got a bit carried away trying to remove the
-  cab.</span><br />
-  They take a quick look at the other machines around them. Apart from the
-  two excavators, there is a dump truck, a <span class="comment"> what's
-  the name of that machine with a conveyor belt that sorts large rocks and
-  rubble from sand?
+  <span class="quote speech">This thing&apos;s just done for. Apart from it
+  being a pile of rust, it&apos;s missing its tracks, the hydraulics for
+  moving the bucket, and it looks like the inside of the cab got completely
+  dismantled.</span><br />
+  They take a quick look at the other machines around them. There is the
+  other, much smaller excavator, a dump truck, a <span class="comment">
+  what's the name of that machine with a conveyor belt that sorts
+  large rocks and rubble from sand?
  <!--
    ChatGPT says "screening plant" but also refers to it as a
    "vibrating belt sorter". Research that.
@ -51,9 +52,9 @@
  are rusted beyond repair and missing integral parts.<br />
 </p>
 <p>
-  A bit further down the valley, they find a much larger assortment of
-  machines, parked in long rows and parted out just like the first ones
-  they saw.<br />
+  A bit further down the valley, they approach a much larger collection of
+  machines, parked in rows and parted out like the first ones they saw.
+  <br />
  Jack says: <span class="quote speech">Welcome to the machine graveyard.
  If memory serves right, there should be a few buildings back there and
  one of the main parking lots behind them.</span><br />
@ -65,29 +66,21 @@
  stuff onto conveyors but most of the machines here were used in
  construction after the digging was done.</span><br />
 </p>
-<p>
-  The buildings are in rough shape, some much worse than others. Most
-  don&apos;t have rooves, a few have been completely reduced to foundations
-  and piles of rubble. The four walk through a gap between them and find
-  themselves on the parking lot. Instead of a forest, they find it mostly
-  overgrown with bushes and young trees. They split up and start roaming
-  the area.
-</p>
 <p class="comment">
-  research that needs to be done:<br />
-  &rarr;When were hydraulic excavators invented?<br />
-  &rarr;When did they get the ability to use a jackhammer attachment?<br />
-  &rarr;When did cable shovels go out of fashion? (Apparently never,
-  depending on use case. From a quick image search, modern ones seem to be
-  huge industrial machines.)<br />
+  research that needs to be done:
+  When were hydraulic excavators invented?
+  When did they get the ability to use a jackhammer attachment?
+  When did the cable-driven ones go out of fashion?
+</p>
+<p>
+  <span class="comment">missing section</span>
 </p>
 <p>
  Annie calls the others over to one of the buildings.<br />
  <span class="quote speech">Look what I found...</span><br />
  Michelle arrives before Jack and she laughs. He arrives a moment
  later and peeks inside. There sits a cable shovel, partially covered
-  in rubble from the <span class="comment">caved-in? fallen-in?</span>
-  roof &ndash; rusty but surprisingly intact.
+  in rubble from the caved-in roof &ndash; rusty but surprisingly intact.
  <br />
  Jack says: <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s ... uhhh ... kind of
  a historical artifact.</span><br />
--- a/zd-Nova_Metropolis.html
+++ b/zd-Nova_Metropolis.html
@ -30,8 +30,8 @@
  The highway ends and transitions into a large road. Michelle decelerates
  the bus.<br />
  <span class="quote speech">Why are you going so slow?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Im going exactly speed limit &ndash; 50
-  kilometers per hour.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Im going exactly speed limit - 50 km/h.</span>
+  <br />
  <span class="quote speech">50? That&apos;s faster than the speed limit in
  Sunside Cove yet this feels so slow...</span><br />
  Michelle chuckles.<br />
@ -49,7 +49,7 @@
  recently. Not even a smashed window.</span><br />
  <span class="quote speech">Over there.</span><br />
  <span class="quote speech">Okay, one smashed window.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">You&apos;re right though. Barely any
+  <span class="quote speech">I mean you&apos;re right. Barely any
  damage &ndash; and surprisingly little sand, I thought we&apos;d
  find a bunch of half-buried ruins.</span><br />
  Michelle pulls up at a bus stop and parks the bus.<br />
@ -66,49 +66,42 @@
  a comfortable position. His words are muffled through the mattres:
  <span class="quote speech">Good night.</span>
 </p>
-<p>
-  Michelle, James, and Annie gather at the front door and step outside.
-  Michelle reaches for the key switch under the headlight and holds it
-  until the door is closed, then she shuts the little door that normally
-  hides it. The three start walking, briefly stopping every few meters to
-  look into the perfectly preserved storefront windows. Many have
-  sunbleached posters hanging in them, some completely faded to white,
-  others still showing faint outlines or even a hint of colors, the goods
-  surrounding them waiting to attrackt buyers who would never return.
+<p class="comment">
+  missing section (and maybe a missing chapter of Jack getting the radio)
 </p>
 <p>
-  A few blocks down the road, they find a music store filled with acoustic
-  instruments. They stop a bit longer. Annie really wants to go inside.
-  She tries the large glass door &ndash; locked, of course.<br />
-  She asks: <span class="quote speech">So... How else can we get
-  inside?</span><br />
-  Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">Break in. Who&apos;s gonna stop
-  you?</span><br />
-  Annie looks around, scanning the floor. She notices some of the small
-  paving stones at the edge of the sidewalk had come loose and picks one
-  up. She hesitates.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">This feels so wrong...</span><br />
-  James, who had been standing off to the side, watching the interaction
-  between the two, steps between Annie and the door.<br />
-  He says: <span class="quote speech">Allow me to work some magic for you.
-  Can I have that thing?</span><br />
-  He takes the paving stone out of her hand and places it right back
-  where she had found it. Then, he takes a keyring out of one of his
-  jacket&apos;s pockets and searches for a specific one. Using that key,
-  he opens a small lock box near the floor next to the door, out of which
-  he grabs another set of keys.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Fire department key. Probably works on most
-  buildings around here. Here you go, your way inside.</span><br />
-  He hands her the keys.
+  <span class="quote speech">Jack is gone</span>, Annie notices while
+  entering the bus. She looks around.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">There&apos;s a note on the table: &quot;Will
+  be back at 06:30&quot;</span><br />
+  Michelle looks at her watch. <span class="quote speech">It <i>is</i>
+  06:30.</span><br />
+  James chimes in: <span class="quote speech">I guess there&apos;s nothing
+  to do but wait. He&apos;ll show up soon enough.</span><br />
+  Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">I sure hope so.</span><br />
+  They place their bags full of found goodies on the floor and sit down
+  around the table.
 </p>
-<p class="comment">
-  Notes to self:<br />
-  Annie will at some point before this have to be comfortable with breaking
-  into lost places in Ivydale / Sentinel Shores.<br />
-  James has changed his green coat for a brown leather jacket before
-  starting the trip to Nova Metropolis.
-</p>
-<p class="comment">
-  missing section about exploring an intricate lobby of some corporate hq
+<p>
+  After a while, they hear a fast car approaching. Looking outside, they
+  see an oldtimer <span class="comment">zoom</span> by. Michelle says:
+  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s him.</span> A moment later, the
+  car returns, braking so hard it leaves tire marks on the road. Jack gets
+  out and waves at them. He turns off the engine and walks to the front of
+  the bus. Annie opens the door.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Where have you been?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">I went on my own little adventure and may or
+  may not have procured some radio equipment.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Didn&apos;t you want to sleep?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Well yeah... And then I had a dream that
+  inspired me to go looking for stuff.</span> He points to the car he
+  arrived in. <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s in the trunk.</span><br />
+  <span class="comment">said dream is him running a radio station and Emily
+  calling in as a guest</span><br />
+  Michelle facepalms. Annie and James look at both of them in confusion.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Is it one of these radios?</span> Michelle
+  makes a gesture showing a big box.<br />
+  <span class="comment">Yes, it is. Make this clear when Jack picks it
+  up.</span>
 </p>
 <p class="copyright">Copyright &#169; 2023-2026 Jan Danielzick (aka. BodgeMaster) &ndash; All rights reserved.</p><script>let spans=["<span class=\"paper green\">","<span>"];let pre_texts=document.getElementsByTagName("pre");for(let i=0;i<pre_texts.length;i++){if(pre_texts[i].className!="paper")continue;let lines=pre_texts[i].innerHTML.split("\n");let result="";for(let j=0;j<lines.length;j++){if(lines[j].length>=80)result=result+spans[j%2]+lines[j]+"</span>\n";else result=result+spans[j%2]+lines[j]+" ".repeat(80-lines[j].length)+"</span>\n";}pre_texts[i].innerHTML=result;}fetch("./chapters.json").then(function(result){return result.json();}).then(function(json){let chapters=json.pages;for(let i=0;i<chapters.length;i++){if(chapters[i]===document.URL.replace(/^.*\//,"./")){let prevdiv=document.createElement("div");prevdiv.className="prev";if(i>0){prevdiv.innerHTML="<a href=\""+chapters[i-1]+"\">&#9667;</a>";}else{prevdiv.innerHTML="<p>&#9667;</p>";}document.body.appendChild(prevdiv);let nextdiv=document.createElement("div");nextdiv.className="next";if(i<chapters.length-1){nextdiv.innerHTML="<a href=\""+chapters[i+1]+"\">&#9657;</a>";}else{nextdiv.innerHTML="<p>&#9657;</p>";}document.body.appendChild(nextdiv);}}});</script></body></html>
--- a/ze-operator.html
+++ b/ze-operator.html
@ -1,12 +0,0 @@
-<!DOCTYPE html><html><head><title> Operator </title><link rel="stylesheet" type="text/css" href="html_resources/style.css"></head><body><svg class="hidden_filter"><filter id="crunchy_blur" x="0" y="0"><feFlood x="4" y="4" height="2" width="2"/><feComposite width="6" height="6" in2="SourceGraphic"/><feTile result="a"/><feComposite in="SourceGraphic" in2="a" operator="in"/><feMorphology operator="dilate" radius="1.4"/><feGaussianBlur stdDeviation="2.2"></feGaussianBlur></filter></svg><div class="home"><a href="index.html">&#8962;</a></div>
-<h1>Operator</h1>
-<!-- pwerpective: Jack -->
-<!--
-Jack has a dream where he is a radio station operator and Emily calls in
-as a guest. He wakes up with the idea to get his hands on a desktop radio
-and some other eqipment
-->
-<p>
-  
-</p>
-<p class="copyright">Copyright &#169; 2023-2026 Jan Danielzick (aka. BodgeMaster) &ndash; All rights reserved.</p><script>let spans=["<span class=\"paper green\">","<span>"];let pre_texts=document.getElementsByTagName("pre");for(let i=0;i<pre_texts.length;i++){if(pre_texts[i].className!="paper")continue;let lines=pre_texts[i].innerHTML.split("\n");let result="";for(let j=0;j<lines.length;j++){if(lines[j].length>=80)result=result+spans[j%2]+lines[j]+"</span>\n";else result=result+spans[j%2]+lines[j]+" ".repeat(80-lines[j].length)+"</span>\n";}pre_texts[i].innerHTML=result;}fetch("./chapters.json").then(function(result){return result.json();}).then(function(json){let chapters=json.pages;for(let i=0;i<chapters.length;i++){if(chapters[i]===document.URL.replace(/^.*\//,"./")){let prevdiv=document.createElement("div");prevdiv.className="prev";if(i>0){prevdiv.innerHTML="<a href=\""+chapters[i-1]+"\">&#9667;</a>";}else{prevdiv.innerHTML="<p>&#9667;</p>";}document.body.appendChild(prevdiv);let nextdiv=document.createElement("div");nextdiv.className="next";if(i<chapters.length-1){nextdiv.innerHTML="<a href=\""+chapters[i+1]+"\">&#9657;</a>";}else{nextdiv.innerHTML="<p>&#9657;</p>";}document.body.appendChild(nextdiv);}}});</script></body></html>
--- a/zf-back_in_a_sec.html
+++ b/zf-back_in_a_sec.html
@ -1,40 +0,0 @@
-<!DOCTYPE html><html><head><title> Back In A Sec </title><link rel="stylesheet" type="text/css" href="html_resources/style.css"></head><body><svg class="hidden_filter"><filter id="crunchy_blur" x="0" y="0"><feFlood x="4" y="4" height="2" width="2"/><feComposite width="6" height="6" in2="SourceGraphic"/><feTile result="a"/><feComposite in="SourceGraphic" in2="a" operator="in"/><feMorphology operator="dilate" radius="1.4"/><feGaussianBlur stdDeviation="2.2"></feGaussianBlur></filter></svg><div class="home"><a href="index.html">&#8962;</a></div>
-<h1>Back In A Sec</h1>
-<!-- perspective: Annie -->
-<p>
-  <span class="comment">missing section?</span>
-</p>
-<p>
-  <span class="quote speech">Jack is gone</span>, Annie notices while
-  entering the bus. She looks around.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">There&apos;s a note on the table: &quot;Will
-  be back at 06:30&quot;</span><br />
-  Michelle looks at her watch. <span class="quote speech">It <i>is</i>
-  06:30.</span><br />
-  James chimes in: <span class="quote speech">I guess there&apos;s nothing
-  to do but wait. He&apos;ll show up soon enough.</span><br />
-  Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">I sure hope so.</span><br />
-  They place their bags full of found goodies on the floor and sit down
-  around the table.
-</p>
-<p>
-  After a while, they hear a fast car approaching. Looking outside, they
-  see an oldtimer <span class="comment">zoom</span> by. Michelle says:
-  <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s him.</span> A moment later, the
-  car returns, braking so hard it leaves tire marks on the road. Jack gets
-  out and waves at them. He turns off the engine and walks to the front of
-  the bus. Annie opens the door.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Where have you been?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">I went on my own little adventure and may or
-  may not have procured some radio equipment.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Didn&apos;t you want to sleep?</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Well yeah... And then I had a dream that
-  inspired me to go looking for stuff.</span> He points to the car he
-  arrived in. <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s in the trunk.</span><br />
-  Michelle facepalms. Annie and James look at both of them in confusion.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Is it one of these radios?</span> Michelle
-  makes a gesture showing a big box.<br />
-  <span class="comment">Yes, it is. Make this clear when Jack picks it
-  up.</span>
-</p>
-<p class="copyright">Copyright &#169; 2023-2026 Jan Danielzick (aka. BodgeMaster) &ndash; All rights reserved.</p><script>let spans=["<span class=\"paper green\">","<span>"];let pre_texts=document.getElementsByTagName("pre");for(let i=0;i<pre_texts.length;i++){if(pre_texts[i].className!="paper")continue;let lines=pre_texts[i].innerHTML.split("\n");let result="";for(let j=0;j<lines.length;j++){if(lines[j].length>=80)result=result+spans[j%2]+lines[j]+"</span>\n";else result=result+spans[j%2]+lines[j]+" ".repeat(80-lines[j].length)+"</span>\n";}pre_texts[i].innerHTML=result;}fetch("./chapters.json").then(function(result){return result.json();}).then(function(json){let chapters=json.pages;for(let i=0;i<chapters.length;i++){if(chapters[i]===document.URL.replace(/^.*\//,"./")){let prevdiv=document.createElement("div");prevdiv.className="prev";if(i>0){prevdiv.innerHTML="<a href=\""+chapters[i-1]+"\">&#9667;</a>";}else{prevdiv.innerHTML="<p>&#9667;</p>";}document.body.appendChild(prevdiv);let nextdiv=document.createElement("div");nextdiv.className="next";if(i<chapters.length-1){nextdiv.innerHTML="<a href=\""+chapters[i+1]+"\">&#9657;</a>";}else{nextdiv.innerHTML="<p>&#9657;</p>";}document.body.appendChild(nextdiv);}}});</script></body></html>
--- a/zz-one_step_for_a_child-end.html
+++ b/zz-one_step_for_a_child-end.html
@ -6,7 +6,7 @@
 <p>
  The group sits around the pot with leftovers on the gas stove, enjoying
  the view of the skyline from above. To increase their odds of seeing
-  where Emily would land, they had decided to wait atop one of the
+  where Emily would land, they had decided to wait on top of one of the
  tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer. The intense light of the
  setting sun paints Nova Metropolis in vibrant hues of yellow and orange
  while the moon is already coming over the horizon. They are engaged in
@ -22,11 +22,12 @@
  <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s time. Emily will be entering the
  atmosphere right about now.</span><br />
  They get up. James pulls a pair of binoculars out of his bag. Jack does
-  the same. Annie looks at both of them - her face clearly showing
+  the same. Annie looks at both of them - her face clearly showing her
  disappointment.<br />
-  Jack says <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I got you.</span>
-  as he pulls a second pair out of his bag and hands it to her.<br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Oooh, thank you!</span> She takes it and they
+  <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I got ya.</span> says Jack
+  as he pulls a second pair out of his bag and hands it to her with a grin.
+  <br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Oh, thank you!</span> She takes it and they
  start walking towards the edge.
 </p>
 <p>
@ -41,8 +42,8 @@
  handing them back to him.<br />
  It looks like a tiny, red glowing dot in the sky, slowly growing in size.
  For a few minutes, not much seems to happen. The dot gets bigger and
-  bigger, slowly turning into a black triangle as the glow fades and finally
-  disappears. The shuttle sheds its heat shields as it comes closer.
+  bigger, turning into a black triangle as the glow fades and finally
+  disappears. The shuttle sheds its heat shield as it slowly comes closer.
 </p>
 <p>
  Around the 15 minute mark, Jack notices that it has moved almost above
@ -54,10 +55,10 @@
  are pretty slim, but something&apos;s not right.</span><br />
  As if on cue, the rear end of the shuttle breaks apart, turning into a
  cloud of fragments. The rest plummets into the city moments later, taking
-  down multiple buildings along with it. The ground shakes slightly. Nobody
-  says a word as they watch the buildings around the impact crumble and
-  the remaining parts of the shuttle rain out of the sky in a mix of shock
-  and awe.
+  multiple buildings down with it. The ground shakes slightly. Nobody says
+  anything for a while as they watch the buildings around the impact
+  crumble and the remaining parts of the shuttle rain out of the sky in a
+  mix of shock and awe.
 </p>
 <p>
  Michelle interrupts the silence: <span class="quote speech">Guys, over