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BodgeMaster 3c6180bc30 general story: The dome city has a name now: Sunside Cove 2024-02-21 07:50:22 +01:00
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Hm...</span><br /> Hm...</span><br />
He goes through the files but to no avail, no backup turns up. Nothing He goes through the files but to no avail, no backup turns up. Nothing
useful either. He does, however, find a note from 2030 saying that the useful either. He does, however, find a note from 2030 saying that the
inhabitants of &lt;dome city&gt; have proven to be unhelpful when asked inhabitants of Sunside&nbsp;Cove have proven to be unhelpful when asked
for assistance. Too bad they are the ones that have a backup of the for assistance. Too bad they are the ones that have a backup of the
secondary hard drive &ndash; assuming there is anyone still living there. secondary hard drive &ndash; assuming there is anyone still living there.
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outside the dome.</span><br /> outside the dome.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">So there is no way we can help him?</span><br /> <span class="quote speech">So there is no way we can help him?</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">Well not directly. Facility 53 does happen to <span class="quote speech">Well not directly. Facility 53 does happen to
be on the mountain above &lt;dome city&gt; but it isn&apos;t connected to be on the mountain above Sunside&nbsp;Cove, but it isn&apos;t connected
the dome.</span><br /> to the dome.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">How did he get there then?</span><br /> <span class="quote speech">How did he get there then?</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">He ... didn&apos;t. He&apos;s been there from <span class="quote speech">He ... didn&apos;t. He&apos;s been there from
the start.</span><br /> the start.</span><br />
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You are in the city under the mountain, right? You are in the city under the mountain, right?
yes &lt;name of city&gt; yes sunside cove
The library should have it. The library should have it.
I need the service manual for a Neotek Dynamics B33FY-AF Bunker Door. I need the service manual for a Neotek Dynamics B33FY-AF Bunker Door.

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<p class="quote speech"> <p class="quote speech">
<span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span> <span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span>
<span class="quote speech">I guess I owe you an explanation. <span class="quote speech">I guess I owe you an explanation.
We are working on getting the gates to the <span class="comment">dome We are working on opening up the gates connecting Sunside&nbsp;Cove to
city</span> opened. When the city was built, it was seen as sort of a the outside world. When the city was built, it was seen as sort of a
plan B for humanity in case things would get worse, not as a hiding temporary plan B for humanity in case things would get worse, not as
space for eternity. Over time though, knowledge of what happened outside a hiding space for all eternity. Over time though, knowledge of what
turned into fear and a bunch of <i>what if</i>s, and any attempt to talk happened outside turned into fear and a bunch of <i>what if</i>s, and
sense into city officials fell on deaf ears.</span> any attempt to talk sense into city officials fell on deaf ears.</span>
</p> </p>
<p class="quote speech"> <p class="quote speech">
<span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span> <span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span>

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through the landscape. Annie looks up, into the distance: The ruins through the landscape. Annie looks up, into the distance: The ruins
further down the valley are larger the closer they are to the center further down the valley are larger the closer they are to the center
of the urban area below.<br /> of the urban area below.<br />
<span class="quote speech">It&apos;s much bigger than &lt;dome <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s much bigger than
city&gt;.</span><br /> Sunside&nbsp;Cove.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">Many things are bigger than &lt;dome city&gt;. <span class="quote speech">Many things are bigger than Sunside&nbsp;Cove.
This is the smaller of two sister cities.</span><br /> This is the smaller of two sister cities.</span><br />
He points towards another urban center in the distance.<br /> He points towards another urban center in the distance.<br />
<span class="quote speech">That over there is Sentinel Shores, the place <span class="quote speech">That over there is Sentinel Shores, the place

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- buildings in various stages of disrepair - buildings in various stages of disrepair
- no sky scrapers - no sky scrapers
- many things were left behind, definitely worth looting random buildings - many things were left behind, definitely worth looting random buildings
- Underground Dome City - Sunside Cove
- still needs a name - underground dome city
- inside a huge hermetically sealed dome under a mountain - inside a huge hermetically sealed dome under a mountain
- basically a normal city otherwise - basically a normal city otherwise
- mostly three to five story buildings - mostly three to five story buildings
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- Jack gets woken up due to impending hardware failure - Jack gets woken up due to impending hardware failure
- Michelle stays preserved until she gets woken up by Jack - Michelle stays preserved until she gets woken up by Jack
- has enough supplies to last a lot of ppl for a long time - has enough supplies to last a lot of ppl for a long time
- <underground dome city> library - Sunside Cove library
- has large computers in the basement - has large computers in the basement
- retro-futuristic data center - retro-futuristic data center
- located in Rogue Tides - located in Rogue Tides

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center console.<br /> center console.<br />
<span class="quote speech">The next maintenence expedition is scheduled <span class="quote speech">The next maintenence expedition is scheduled
for 2011... I don&apos;t think anyone ever stepped foot in here after for 2011... I don&apos;t think anyone ever stepped foot in here after
&lt;dome city&gt; was closed off.</span><br /> Sunside&nbsp;Cove was sealed off.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">It wouldn&apos;t surprise me.</span> Annie <span class="quote speech">It wouldn&apos;t surprise me.</span> Annie
turns around and leans against the center console. turns around and leans against the center console.
<span class="quote speech">Apart from a small group, the entire city is <span class="quote speech">Apart from a small group, the entire city is

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<p> <p>
The group sits around the pot with leftovers on the gas stove, enjoying The group sits around the pot with leftovers on the gas stove, enjoying
the view of the skyline from above. They had decided to wait on top of the view of the skyline from above. To increase their odds of seeing
one of the tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer to increase their where Emily would land, they had decided to wait on top of one of the
odds of seeing where Emily would land. The intense light of the setting tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer. The intense light of the
sun paints Nova Metropolis in vibrant hues of yellow and orange and the setting sun paints Nova Metropolis in vibrant hues of yellow and orange
moon is already visible in the sky. They are engaged in a conversation while the moon is already coming over the horizon. They are engaged in
about the mind-boggling vastness of space and all it contains. a conversation about the mind-boggling vastness of space and all it
contains.
</p> </p>
<p class="strong"> <p class="strong">
bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep
</p> </p>
<p> <p>
The alarm on Jack&apos;s watch interrupts them. He presses one of the The alarm on Jack&apos;s watch interrupts them. He presses one of the
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They get up. James pulls a pair of binoculars out of his bag. Jack does They get up. James pulls a pair of binoculars out of his bag. Jack does
the same. Annie looks at both of them - her face clearly showing her the same. Annie looks at both of them - her face clearly showing her
disappointment.<br /> disappointment.<br />
<span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I gotchu.</span> says Jack <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I got ya.</span> says Jack
as he pulls a second pair out of his bag before they start walking as he pulls a second pair out of his bag and hands it to her with a grin.
towards the edge. <br />
<span class="quote speech">Oh, thank you!</span> She takes it and they
start walking towards the edge.
</p> </p>
<p> <p>
Michelle and James are already leaning against the railing and looking Michelle and James are already leaning against the railing and looking
towards the sky. Jack and Annie join them. Jack takes a compass out of towards the sky. Annie and Jack join them. Jack takes a compass out of
his pocket and briefly looks at it. Then, he points in a direction in the his pocket and briefly looks at it. Then, he points in a direction in the
sky and says:<br /> sky and says:<br />
<span class="quote speech">The shuttle should appear somewhere around <span class="quote speech">The shuttle should appear somewhere around
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<span class="quote speech">I see it! There!</span> she exclaims before <span class="quote speech">I see it! There!</span> she exclaims before
handing them back to him.<br /> handing them back to him.<br />
It looks like a tiny, red glowing dot in the sky, slowly growing in size. It looks like a tiny, red glowing dot in the sky, slowly growing in size.
For a few minutes, nothing seems to happen. The dot gets bigger and For a few minutes, not much seems to happen. The dot gets bigger and
bigger, turning into a black triangle as the glow dims and finally bigger, turning into a black triangle as the glow fades and finally
disappears. The shuttle sheds its heat shield as it slowly comes closer. disappears. The shuttle sheds its heat shield as it slowly comes closer.
</p> </p>
<p> <p>
Around the 15 minute mark, Jack notices that it has moved almost above Around the 15 minute mark, Jack notices that it has moved almost above
them.<br /> them.<br />
<span class="quote speech">That&apos;s a bit too close for comfort &ndash; <span class="quote speech">That&apos;s a bit too close for comfort
and way too fast.</span> he says.<br /> &ndash; and way too fast.</span><br />
Parts appear to be breaking off from it. They watch the last couple Looking at Annie, who seems visibly scared, he adds:<br />
minutes of the fall realizing that something has gone seriously wrong. <span class="quote speech">It&apos;s not gonna hit us, the odds of that
It plummets into the city, taking multiple buildings down with it. are pretty slim, but something&apos;s not right.</span><br />
The ground shakes slightly. Nobody says anything for a while as they As if on cue, the back of the shuttle breaks apart, turning into a
watch the buildings around the impact crumble and the remaining parts cloud of fragments. <span class="comment">need a better way to say the
rain out of the sky in a mix of awe and shock. very back</span> The rest plummets into the city moments later, taking
multiple buildings down with it. The ground shakes slightly. Nobody says
anything for a while as they watch the buildings around the impact
crumble and the remaining parts of the shuttle rain out of the sky in a
mix of shock and awe.
</p> </p>
<p> <p>
Michelle interrupts the silence: <span class="quote speech">Guys, over Michelle interrupts the silence: <span class="quote speech">Guys, over
there!</span> She points into the sky behind them. there!</span> She points into the sky behind them.
<span class="quote speech">A parachute...</span><br /> <span class="quote speech">A parachute...</span><br />
<span class="comment">Jack: She has more luck than sense.</span><br />
<span class="comment">reaction needed &ndash; something along the lines <span class="comment">reaction needed &ndash; something along the lines
of &quot;Sie hat mehr Gl&uuml;ck als Verstand&quot;</span><br /> of &quot;Sie hat mehr Gl&uuml;ck als Verstand&quot;</span><br />
They watch as it disappears between the buildings. They watch as it disappears between the buildings.
</p> </p>
<p> <p>
Annie walks over to Jack&apos;s bag and, on a hunch, unpacks the radio Annie walks over to their bags and, on a hunch, unpacks the radio
he had insisted on bringing.<br /> Jack had insisted on bringing.<br />
<span class="quote speech">Maybe, she can hear us from here...</span> <span class="quote speech">Maybe, she can hear us from here...</span>
<br /> <br />
She hooks up the battery, flips the power switch, and turns the frequency She hooks up the battery, flips the power switch, and turns the frequency
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that clear at some point before this chapter. Maybe include the part where that clear at some point before this chapter. Maybe include the part where
Jack insists on bringing it.</span><br /> Jack insists on bringing it.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">Emily, can you hear us? Are you okay?</span> <span class="quote speech">Emily, can you hear us? Are you okay?</span>
<span class="comment">Might benefit from proper radio protocol</span>
<br /> <br />
They hear a slightly distorted but clearly happy response through the They hear a slightly distorted but clearly happy response through the
noise:<br /> noise:<br />