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BodgeMaster 3c6180bc30 general story: The dome city has a name now: Sunside Cove 2024-02-21 07:50:22 +01:00
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Hm...</span><br />
He goes through the files but to no avail, no backup turns up. Nothing
useful either. He does, however, find a note from 2030 saying that the
inhabitants of &lt;dome city&gt; have proven to be unhelpful when asked
inhabitants of Sunside&nbsp;Cove have proven to be unhelpful when asked
for assistance. Too bad they are the ones that have a backup of the
secondary hard drive &ndash; assuming there is anyone still living there.
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outside the dome.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">So there is no way we can help him?</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">Well not directly. Facility 53 does happen to
be on the mountain above &lt;dome city&gt; but it isn&apos;t connected to
the dome.</span><br />
be on the mountain above Sunside&nbsp;Cove, but it isn&apos;t connected
to the dome.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">How did he get there then?</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">He ... didn&apos;t. He&apos;s been there from
the start.</span><br />
@ -229,7 +229,7 @@ i dont know where would i find it
You are in the city under the mountain, right?
yes &lt;name of city&gt;
yes sunside cove
The library should have it.
I need the service manual for a Neotek Dynamics B33FY-AF Bunker Door.

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<p class="quote speech">
<span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span>
<span class="quote speech">I guess I owe you an explanation.
We are working on getting the gates to the <span class="comment">dome
city</span> opened. When the city was built, it was seen as sort of a
plan B for humanity in case things would get worse, not as a hiding
space for eternity. Over time though, knowledge of what happened outside
turned into fear and a bunch of <i>what if</i>s, and any attempt to talk
sense into city officials fell on deaf ears.</span>
We are working on opening up the gates connecting Sunside&nbsp;Cove to
the outside world. When the city was built, it was seen as sort of a
temporary plan B for humanity in case things would get worse, not as
a hiding space for all eternity. Over time though, knowledge of what
happened outside turned into fear and a bunch of <i>what if</i>s, and
any attempt to talk sense into city officials fell on deaf ears.</span>
</p>
<p class="quote speech">
<span class="comment">TODO: whole paragraph speech formatting</span>

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through the landscape. Annie looks up, into the distance: The ruins
further down the valley are larger the closer they are to the center
of the urban area below.<br />
<span class="quote speech">It&apos;s much bigger than &lt;dome
city&gt;.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">Many things are bigger than &lt;dome city&gt;.
<span class="quote speech">It&apos;s much bigger than
Sunside&nbsp;Cove.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">Many things are bigger than Sunside&nbsp;Cove.
This is the smaller of two sister cities.</span><br />
He points towards another urban center in the distance.<br />
<span class="quote speech">That over there is Sentinel Shores, the place

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@ -20,8 +20,8 @@ Cities:
- buildings in various stages of disrepair
- no sky scrapers
- many things were left behind, definitely worth looting random buildings
- Underground Dome City
- still needs a name
- Sunside Cove
- underground dome city
- inside a huge hermetically sealed dome under a mountain
- basically a normal city otherwise
- mostly three to five story buildings
@ -82,7 +82,7 @@ Facilities/Institutions:
- Jack gets woken up due to impending hardware failure
- Michelle stays preserved until she gets woken up by Jack
- has enough supplies to last a lot of ppl for a long time
- <underground dome city> library
- Sunside Cove library
- has large computers in the basement
- retro-futuristic data center
- located in Rogue Tides

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center console.<br />
<span class="quote speech">The next maintenence expedition is scheduled
for 2011... I don&apos;t think anyone ever stepped foot in here after
&lt;dome city&gt; was closed off.</span><br />
Sunside&nbsp;Cove was sealed off.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">It wouldn&apos;t surprise me.</span> Annie
turns around and leans against the center console.
<span class="quote speech">Apart from a small group, the entire city is

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<p>
The group sits around the pot with leftovers on the gas stove, enjoying
the view of the skyline from above. They had decided to wait on top of
one of the tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer to increase their
odds of seeing where Emily would land. The intense light of the setting
sun paints Nova Metropolis in vibrant hues of yellow and orange and the
moon is already visible in the sky. They are engaged in a conversation
about the mind-boggling vastness of space and all it contains.
the view of the skyline from above. To increase their odds of seeing
where Emily would land, they had decided to wait on top of one of the
tallest sky scrapers the city had to offer. The intense light of the
setting sun paints Nova Metropolis in vibrant hues of yellow and orange
while the moon is already coming over the horizon. They are engaged in
a conversation about the mind-boggling vastness of space and all it
contains.
</p>
<p class="strong">
bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep
bebebebeep bebebebeep bebebebeep
</p>
<p>
The alarm on Jack&apos;s watch interrupts them. He presses one of the
@ -22,13 +23,15 @@
They get up. James pulls a pair of binoculars out of his bag. Jack does
the same. Annie looks at both of them - her face clearly showing her
disappointment.<br />
<span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I gotchu.</span> says Jack
as he pulls a second pair out of his bag before they start walking
towards the edge.
<span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t worry, I got ya.</span> says Jack
as he pulls a second pair out of his bag and hands it to her with a grin.
<br />
<span class="quote speech">Oh, thank you!</span> She takes it and they
start walking towards the edge.
</p>
<p>
Michelle and James are already leaning against the railing and looking
towards the sky. Jack and Annie join them. Jack takes a compass out of
towards the sky. Annie and Jack join them. Jack takes a compass out of
his pocket and briefly looks at it. Then, he points in a direction in the
sky and says:<br />
<span class="quote speech">The shuttle should appear somewhere around
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<span class="quote speech">I see it! There!</span> she exclaims before
handing them back to him.<br />
It looks like a tiny, red glowing dot in the sky, slowly growing in size.
For a few minutes, nothing seems to happen. The dot gets bigger and
bigger, turning into a black triangle as the glow dims and finally
For a few minutes, not much seems to happen. The dot gets bigger and
bigger, turning into a black triangle as the glow fades and finally
disappears. The shuttle sheds its heat shield as it slowly comes closer.
</p>
<p>
Around the 15 minute mark, Jack notices that it has moved almost above
them.<br />
<span class="quote speech">That&apos;s a bit too close for comfort &ndash;
and way too fast.</span> he says.<br />
Parts appear to be breaking off from it. They watch the last couple
minutes of the fall realizing that something has gone seriously wrong.
It plummets into the city, taking multiple buildings down with it.
The ground shakes slightly. Nobody says anything for a while as they
watch the buildings around the impact crumble and the remaining parts
rain out of the sky in a mix of awe and shock.
<span class="quote speech">That&apos;s a bit too close for comfort
&ndash; and way too fast.</span><br />
Looking at Annie, who seems visibly scared, he adds:<br />
<span class="quote speech">It&apos;s not gonna hit us, the odds of that
are pretty slim, but something&apos;s not right.</span><br />
As if on cue, the back of the shuttle breaks apart, turning into a
cloud of fragments. <span class="comment">need a better way to say the
very back</span> The rest plummets into the city moments later, taking
multiple buildings down with it. The ground shakes slightly. Nobody says
anything for a while as they watch the buildings around the impact
crumble and the remaining parts of the shuttle rain out of the sky in a
mix of shock and awe.
</p>
<p>
Michelle interrupts the silence: <span class="quote speech">Guys, over
there!</span> She points into the sky behind them.
<span class="quote speech">A parachute...</span><br />
<span class="comment">Jack: She has more luck than sense.</span><br />
<span class="comment">reaction needed &ndash; something along the lines
of &quot;Sie hat mehr Gl&uuml;ck als Verstand&quot;</span><br />
They watch as it disappears between the buildings.
</p>
<p>
Annie walks over to Jack&apos;s bag and, on a hunch, unpacks the radio
he had insisted on bringing.<br />
Annie walks over to their bags and, on a hunch, unpacks the radio
Jack had insisted on bringing.<br />
<span class="quote speech">Maybe, she can hear us from here...</span>
<br />
She hooks up the battery, flips the power switch, and turns the frequency
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that clear at some point before this chapter. Maybe include the part where
Jack insists on bringing it.</span><br />
<span class="quote speech">Emily, can you hear us? Are you okay?</span>
<span class="comment">Might benefit from proper radio protocol</span>
<br />
They hear a slightly distorted but clearly happy response through the
noise:<br />