'pa' Bare Necessities: revise chapter end (unfinished)
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and Jack. <span class="quote speech">Follow me.</span>
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Mary says: <span class="quote speech">The closest access point is right
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Mary says: <span class="quote speech">The closest access hole is right
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there, behind the store.</span><br />
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They walk around it and onto a field of <span class="comment">withering?
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</span> plants. A large, partially buried pipe with just the top exposed
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goes through it with an access hatch roughly in the center of the field.
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Right next to the hatch is a <span class="comment">Gestell?</span> with
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a boom to lower a large bucket into the access hatch.<br />
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a boom to lower a large bucket down into it.<br />
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Jack asks: <span class="quote speech">Is it all like this, buried pipes
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going to fields?</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Mostly. In the greenhouses, it's just
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connects to the inlet. It's a bit of a walk but I can show
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you.</span><br />
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She gestures for them to follow but Jack stops her:<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Wait, we can take the truck.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">That's <i>your</i> car?</span><br />
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Her sudden excitement seems to take Jack by surprise.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Uhh... yeah.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">That's so cool! I've only ever seen
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the broken ones by the side of the road. We gonna drive there?</span>
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<span class="quote speech">Wait, we can drive there.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">That's <i>your</i> car? Heck yeah!</span>
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<br />
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<span class="quote speech">If you show the way.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">Heck yeah!</span>
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<p class="comment">
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Not sure of this should be the end of a chapter or if I should continue
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here.<br />
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One thing that has happened is that this chapter, while written from
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Annie's perspective, has her be a passive bystander without even
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having any introspection for most of it. This needs to be adressed
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somehow.
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<p class="comment">
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Description of the inlet: Two <translate: Stauwehre>, a large one
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and a small one. The small one can be adjusted with large screws.
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Behind the small one is a pit with a grate covering the tunnel entrance.
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They see a railway bridge not too far upstream.
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<span class="quote speech">Uhh... yes.</span><br />
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He seems to be taken aback by her sudden excitement.<br />
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<span class="comment">Missing: explanation, they go to car, Mary sits in
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the front with Jack</span>
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