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<h1>Telescope</h1>
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Michelle says: <span class="quote speech">I know the way.</span><br />
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Jack extends his hand with the keys.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Wanna drive?</span><br />
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Jack extends his hand with the keys.<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Sure.</span><br />
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She takes them and the four get in the truck. A few moments later,
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Michelle pulls onto the road in front of the bunker.<br />
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James asks: <span class="quote speech">How far is it?</span><br />
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She takes them and the four get in the truck. James joins Michelle in
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the front while Annie and Jack take the rear seats. A few moments later,
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Michelle pulls onto the street in front of the bunker.<br />
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James asks her: <span class="quote speech">How far is it?</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">A decent bit. Used to be about an hour on the
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highway. If it's in even somewhat decent shape, I'd say
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highway... If it's in even somewhat decent shape, I'd say
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we're gonna make it there in about that time.</span><br />
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She turns right at an intersection onto the on-ramp, saying:<br />
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<span class="quote speech">Gonna find out very soon...</span>
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<p>
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The pavement is cracked and has potholes, and the highway is partially
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overgrown but, despite this, its condition is somehow good enough.
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Michelle floors it and the remains of the city outskirts flies by.
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Michelle floors it and the truck rattles and shakes as it accelerates
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on the uneven asphalt. James <span class="comment">hangs on to the handle
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</span>in the door as the remains of the city outskirts fly by.
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Michelle notices it:<br />
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<span class="quote speech">You don't need to hold on, that seat
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belt is gonna hold you.</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">How are you not absolutely terrified by the
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speed you're going?</span><br />
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<span class="quote speech">You get used to it after a while... Also,
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I know the capabilities of this car very well – I used to drive
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one like this.</span>
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</p>
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<p>
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Within a few minutes, they make it out of Ivydale, leaving its valley
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behind. The mountains make way for an area of plains and
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<span class="comment">low, smooth</span> hills. She takes an exit onto
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another highway. The large, rusty signs above it still indicate the
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proximity of Sentinel Shores where they haven't faded completely.
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behind. The mountains make way for an area of plains and shallow hills.
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She takes an exit onto another highway. The large, rusty signs above
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still indicate the proximity of Sentinel Shores where they haven't
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faded completely. <span class="comment">feels like something is missing
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here</span>
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</p>
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<p>
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The highway takes them north, around the western part of Ivydale's
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