'mc' Welcome Home: continue writing

Yup, great achievement. It took meeting with someone irl
for feedback to finally get around to it.

01-Wake_Up-Jack_intro.html

@@ -151,8 +151,8 @@ $ █
 </p>
 <p>
   He gets up and reaches for the phone. It lifts off the cradle with a
-  quiet click. Jack holds it to his ear and starts dialing but realizes
+  quiet click. Jack holds it to his ear and starts dialing but there is no
-  quickly that there is no <span class="comment">Freizeichen?</span>.
+  dial tone.
   <span class="quote speech">Welp, that&apos;s that.</span>
 </p>
 

deployment-script.sh

@@ -3,6 +3,7 @@ cp html_resources/index_template.html index.html
 
 function genlinks {
   for FILE in $(find . -maxdepth 1 -type f -name "??-*.html" | sort); do
+    echo "$FILE" >&2
     echo -ne "  <li><a href=\"$FILE\">\n"
     echo -n "    $(sed -e 's|^\./||;s/-.*//' <<< "$FILE") <span class="'"chapter">'
     grep -oe "<title>.*</title>" $FILE | sed -e 's/<title> //;s| </title>|</span>|'

mc-welcome_home.html

@@ -11,20 +11,48 @@
 
 <p>
   <span class="quote speech">I smell fire.</span><br />
-  <span class="quote speech">Yes, we&apos;re very close now.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Yes, we&apos;re almost there.</span><br />
-  Annie is slightly confused by his answer and how seemingly
+  Annie is slightly confused by his answer and how seemingly unfazed he is.
-  <span class="comment">unfazed? Is that how you spell it?</span> he is.
   <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">But ... Don&apos;t you want to do anything
+  <span class="quote speech">Don&apos;t you want to do anything about
-  about it?</span><br />
+  it?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Fires out here aren&apos;t generally bad news.
   Sometimes, they are, but this one is our campfire.</span>
 </p>
 <p>
-  They walk over a <span class="comment">Grat? Ausl&auml;ufer?</span>,
+  They walk over a ridge, revealing a view of the small valley beyond.
-  revealing a view of the small valley beyond. The large, open bunker door
+  The large, open bunker door is visible on the other side, in front of it
-  is visible on the other side, in front of it a small fire with a person
+  a small fire with a person sitting next to it.<br />
-  sitting next to it.
+  <span class="comment">Is there a word for a terrain feature like a valley
+  but a lot smaller?</span>
+</p>
+<p>
+  They make their way across and Jack introduces Michelle and Annie to each
+  other.<br />
+  <span class="quote speech">So you join us out here after all?</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Well, I&apos;d rather be here unprepared than
+  in <span class="comment">prison? jail?</span>. Things kinda went south
+  quickly.</span></br />
+  They all sit down around the fire. Annie recounts the events of the recent
+  past and things going wrong. <span class="comment">Idk, something needs
+  to happen here. They start making food or whatever.</span>
+</p>
+<p>
+  Michelle tilts her head, then turns around. <span class="quote speech">Is
+  that a dog? There&apos;s a dog here!</span><br />
+  A medium-sized dog runs out of the bushes, barks and then turns around
+  and runs back. A moment latrer, it reappears, followed by an
+  <span class="comment">unkempt?</span> dude wearing a long coat
+  that has been patched a couple times. He holds a long staff, using it as
+  a <span class="comment">Wanderstab?</span>.
+</p>
+<p>
+  <span class="quote speech">Good evening, people!</span>
+  <span class="comment">realistic?</span><br />
+  Michelle replies: <span class="quote speech">Evening.</span><br />
+  <span class="quote speech">Dora, sit!</span><br />
+  The others greet the stranger as well. He asks for directions to the
+  Sentinel Shores observatory.<br />
 </p>
 
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