02 Unlikely encounter: revision (mostly language improvements)

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   or be annoyed. Also, this place,
   <span class="quote non-speech">Cryo&nbsp;Facility&nbsp;53</span>, she had
   never heard of it. The only one who might know more about it is her
-  grandpa, as he used to work for the power company and had studied the
+  grandpa, as he had studied the plans of the city very thoroughly during
-  plans of the city very thoroughly. So she dials his number...
+  his time at the power company. So she dials his number...
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   Annie is greeted by the friendly voice of an old man. After
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   the start.</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">How?</span><br />
   <span class="quote speech">Cryogenic sleep - it&apos;s a way to preserve
-  people for a log time. It was thought to be impossible for a long time
+  people for a log time by essentially freezing them. It was thought to be
-  but they somehow made it work just before the apocalypse happened.</span>
+  impossible for a long time but they made it work just before the
+  apocalypse happened.</span>
   <br />
-  <span class="quote speech">He&apos;s one from the old world? Doesn&apos;t
+  <span class="quote speech">He&apos;s one from the old world?</span><br />
-  that mean that he&apos;s way over a hundred years old?</span><br />
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   A cup of juice and two cookies later, she hears the telephone ring in the
   basement. Annie grabs another cookie and hurries back down the stairs.
-  She makes it to the desk just in time for the phone to stop ringing. The
+  She makes it to the desk just in time for it to stop ringing. The text on
-  text on the terminal disappears. She looks back and forth between the
+  the terminal disappears. She looks back and forth between the phone and
-  phone and the terminal for a moment. A new message appears. She sits down
+  the terminal for a moment. A new message appears. She sits down and
-  and replies:
+  replies:
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   Annie closes the door behind herself and locks it. As she takes a breath
   of the slightly humid air, she steps back onto the sidewalk to look at
-  the clock above the entrance... 8:25 PM - the realization of how much
+  the clock above the entrance... 8:25 PM &ndash; the realization of how
-  time had passed hits: Normally she&apos;d be at home already. She starts
+  much time had passed hits: Normally she&apos;d be at home already. She
-  walking towards the metro station at the corner. The buildings here are
+  starts walking towards the metro station at the corner. The buildings
-  similar to the ones in <span class="comment">Wohngebieten?</span> - three
+  here are similar to the ones in residential areas &ndash; three to four
-  to four story houses painted in different colors - but they are lacking
+  story houses painted in different colors &ndash; but they are lacking
   balconies and, instead of being homes, they mostly house offices. On the
   other side of the street is an embankment that holds the rails for the
   metro and beyond that is the outer wall of the dome. The street lights

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